Reflecting time
Most comments I got back on my previous pitch video were positive, the only main redress was my speaking speed. I took several attempts at maintaining my vocal speed, but some parts get a little winded and I don't want to lose time so it may still have some bursts. One comment that was very illuminating that Zahra mentioned about the use by criminals, and while I can never condone criminal activity, the protection of privacy writ large is more valuable to me than the marginal return of security for surveillance.
Changes?
Nothing besides pitch and some word changes, otherwise some fresh jokes at the end. I got more comfortable with explaining the product as I tried explaining it to friends throughout the week to see if I can communicate what I was trying to pitch.
My voice tends to change pitch when I get flustered or nervous, so I totally get it. If I'm nervous and I try to say something I can get winded very easily so I get where you are coming from on both issues. Luckily they are simple to address so keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteThat was a fantastic pitch, certainly getting a lot more comfortable in front of the camera, unlike myself aha. I noticed a slight hiccup near to the end of the recording however, besides from that I thought it was a fantastic and relatable idea that has the potential for serious success in the near future. I am actually from London which is interestingly enough the most surveilled city in Europe, and 2nd in the world to China.
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